domingo, 28 de agosto de 2011

Myself. (Pag 24 sb)

I'm calm, confident and friendly. I like to work with a team player and an optimistic person.
When I was younger I used to go out and to drink a lot during all night with my friends. But my habits are changing and becoming better. Nowadays I love staying home, going out and traveling with my family. When I stay home, I love to listen to music, and to watch soccer on tv.     
But, one thing didn't changed: I like to make friends like my classmates of União.

Arildo

Um comentário:

  1. Hi there 'Who am I'...
    I checked your writing and underlined some sentences/words. Take a look at them and check the notes below.

    1.I have been calm, confidant and friendly - YOU'RE NOT ANYMORE?
    2. like work - WE NEED TO SEPARATE THESE TWO VERBS...WHAT CAN YOU USE?
    3.team player and optimistic person. - SINGULAR? DON'T WE NEED TO USE AN ARTICLE? E.G. A NURSE; AN OPTIMISTIC PERSON...
    4. had changing and getting better - HERE WE HAVE SOME VERB CONFUSION- HAD-PAST CHANGING - GERUND? YOU MEAN HAD CHANGED? GETTING BETTER - YOU MEAN GOT BETTER?
    5. football - DID YOU MEAN SOCCER?
    6. doesn't changed - DOESN'T = PRESENT / CHANGED = PAST...HOW CAN WE CORRECT IT?
    7. 'AS' YOU MEAN 'WITH'

    YOU KNOW WHO I AM....rs

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